PuPu's Saga Chapter 10 by Jeremy Chapter
Setting 10: 1910 DAY 15, Directly
over Esthar City
"Ah, Genoese, a people
strange to every
constraint of custom, full of
all corruption,
why have you net been driven
from the world?"
-Dante Alighieri
Inferno XXXIII
<KyKy! What have you been up to>?
Specifically directed interrogative and agitation
alienangst
(by Carina Edberg)
<Are you soliciting an
actual answer>? Rhetorical question and smugness
<Tell me, because this time,
I do not know>! Imperative directive and testiness
<Easy there, my friend>
Mitigating concession, surprise, elliptical imperative directive,
and fading effervescence
<I am your colleague and I
have the same stakes as you in completing this mission by the
book> Critical declaration, referential reminder, and
implied, imputed warning
<
> Pause, surprise,
and uncertainty
<I should have been
consulted before you made any moves> Critical declaration,
indirect plaintive declaration, and anger
<My apologies, FeFe, but you
were comatose at the time and such a trivial matter did not seem
to merit disturbing you> Preplanned explanation, wishful
thinking, declaration of self-exculpation
<You deem direct interaction
with a sample individual without the Carrier's order a trivial
matter>? Derisive rhetorical question, implied, imputed
warning, and intimated challenge
<It does not interfere with
the rest of our data collection because no one will know she is
missing, including her father, as we both know you already know,
on whom we have experimented for quite some time>
Mitigating clarification, referential reminder, steadiness, and
slight humor
<I still think you are out
of line> Quasi-patronizing declaration, implied, imputed
warning, hint directive, and hesitancy
<Just think of it as my
gesture to reunite the girl and her father> Mitigating
ludicrous explanation, imperative directive, and humor
<Unlikely even if were not a
lie> Rebuff, false concession, latent affront, and
dissatisfaction
<Again, I apologize, but at
least consider that I have not put her through the testing
process yet> Mitigating concession, passive directive, and
declaration
<Why else would you have
Archangel intercept her and take her to the test site>?
Specifically directed interrogative, suspicion, and
self-satisfaction
<Clearly in the interests of
the father and daughter's well being and reconciliation did I act>
Reflex ludicrous response and feigned benevolence
<Right> Scorn and
doubt
<I made the decision under
duress> Mitigating explanation and impeding reminder
<From what source>?
Interrogative and curiosity
<I have learned recently
that the two of the specimens have been tailing us>
Declaration and pensiveness
<You were so sure that they
were too primitive to detect us, though> Quasi-dismissal,
jeering reminder, and humor
<What do you propose we do
now to amend the situation>? Sudden interrogative,
deliberate deference, and intimated challenge
<
> Pause, uncertainty,
and fruitlessness
<We both know we can not
just set her back where we found her> Self-evident,
didactic declaration
<You did not just happen to
'find her'- you targeted her> Brusque correction and
purposive interference
<So I did, but I had a
reason> Preplanned explanation, smugness, declaration of
self-exculpation
<And what would that be>?
Derisive interrogative, information interrogative, and intimated
challenge
<You already know>
Patronizing reminder
<Even if your theory that
one of their kind kidnapped PuPu is accurate, you need not target
an individual so closely associated with the one they call
'Squall'> Critical declaration, false concession,
curiosity, latent affront, and dissatisfaction
<In the eventuality that our
comrade is still alive, I think we should have one of theirs to
ransom for his release> Preplanned clarification and
intimated challenge
<Would not that other girl
be enough>? Derisive rhetorical question
<Precaution minimizes the
unexpected> Didactic quotation, pride, and imbedded excuse
<But why the one they call
'Rinoa' out of all the possibilities>? Interrogative,
curiosity, and reflex defensive protest
<You already know that too>
Patronizing reminder
<All you have is
circumstantial evidence; what makes you so sure Squall was
involved in PuPu's disappearance>? Critical interrogative,
curiosity, mistrust, and amusement
<Turn your attention to the
recording> Calm directive and smugness
<I have heard it already and
noted how ambiguous and inconclusive it is> Reflex
dismissal, aloofness, and quasi-patronizing reminder
<Turn your attention to our
new digital recording> Preplanned explanation, imperative
directive, calmness, and high hopes
<What is that>?
Deferential interrogative, interest, uncertainty, and closer
inspection
<My attempt to reveal the
true, depraved nature of these self-destructive savages>
Stalwart declaration, biased opinion, deliberate denigration, and
pleasure
<My word>! Awareness,
shock, and disgust
<Yes> Casual
acknowledgement and internal revel
<The entire lusty band is
converging on the one they call 'Quistis'>
<Is this the behavior of a
species at peace with itself>?
<Unbelievable>!
Sudden exclamation, suspicion, internal conflict
<Their actions as a group
reflect negatively on their leader's character, the one they call
'Squall'> Didactic declaration, stalwart proposition,
biased conclusion, and disdain
<I never would have guessed>
Passive declaration, imbedded concurrence, and resigned admission
<The one they call 'Squall'
is no less impure at heart; he would have been perfectly capable
of abducting, or killing, our comrade> Stalwart
declaration, self-assuredness, and accusation with finality
<I am still inclined to give
them the benefit of the doubt> Earnest opinion, hesitancy,
and internal struggle
<True innocence reveals
itself, and so far his has not done so> Didactic
quotation, self-assuredness, and insinuation of stalwart
conclusion
<I hope you know what you
are doing> Earnest opinion, hint directive and implied,
imputed warning
<We both know I do>
Complacent, self-evident declaration and passive reminder
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Jeremy's Scribbles:
If you didn't catch this in the notes after the
prologue or after setting 03, I have a unique method of
transcribing what the aliens are communicating.
The "stage directions" after each
line they communicates are necessary, and they aren't stage
directions; PuPu's alien clan does not communicate with their
voices, only their thoughts. They don't have facial expressions
either, which means to communicate elements such as sarcasm or
emotion, I have to add the "stage directions" and, if
you noticed, keep the emotion-denoting punctuation marks
(question or exclamation) outside of the <brackets>.
In actuality, those "stage
directions" are called the "pragmatics" of
language. The words they actually "speak" are called
the "semantics" of language. Because they aren't
actually making any sounds with their mouths, I used
<brackets> instead of "quotations" to indicate
what they want to <communicate> with their thoughts. Also,
throughout the rest of the story, thoughts are italicized
and speech is unmodified. So what the aliens want to communicate
show up <like this>.
However, even by including the pragmatics after
the semantics, there is still no way I can differentiate for you
which alien is which. If they did not greet each other when a
third or fourth being waltzed in, or say their respective names
in each line, we would have no idea who the addresser and
addressee were for any given statement. That is the flaw of
indirect narration, I'm afraid, and I will try to find was to
rectify it.
The more aggressive alien is pretty sure that
Squall is the perpetrator. While he acts like the authority
figure, just know that they are equals.
I would appreciate your reviews for this
chapter and every chapter so I can see what you are thinking and
go back and make corrections for other readers if I see that
everyone is stumbling between the same two chapters. It would
also facilitate correcting spelling or grammar errors if you
would report them in that chapter's review.
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